Timestamp 4:45 is when this song gets real. Not that it wasn’t real before, that’s not what I mean. This whole song is real. But when it really gets real, it…you know what, wow, look at that super fancy lighting in the thumbnail, let’s just listen to the song, shall we? We’re in SPOILER territoryContinue reading “don’t you know, we can’t handle this?”
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Mirror, mirror, rippling water/a majorly revised opening scene
This is from my story Graveyard of Lullabies. I’m comparing Recent revisions vs. the original chapter 1 posted to my blog a year ago. *** Today is the day I bleed aquamarine. The blue-green liquid soaks into my fuzzy pillow, spreading like melted ice. I blink at it. It is a nice pillow. But first:Continue reading “Mirror, mirror, rippling water/a majorly revised opening scene”
How I revise a story–fight scene
You can check out this story on Wattpad here! This week, I’ll be looking at a fight scene I wrote at the end of chapter 2. First draft vs. most recent draft. *** “Stay back,” red-orange light illuminated the alley, revealing Dante had set aside his bundle of waters and sodas and chips bags, leavingContinue reading “How I revise a story–fight scene”
How I revise a story
This is the first scene of Kree Annihilators, comparing the 1st draft with how it looks after recent revisions. For this article, I broke it down into a few paragraphs at a time, with underlined sections from the first draft and non-underlined sections from post-revision (you may have to view this article on my websiteContinue reading “How I revise a story”
Haiku #5
At this point, it really should be quite evident that I didn’t follow the traditional rules of writing a haiku (see this post, and this post. And also this
Haiku #2, Haiku #3
Some things I learned in the past week about traditional haikus: 1, they typically avoid metaphors and similes, or figurative language in general. 2, since they’re focused on nature, they tend not to include people. Or people related things. So many things I am learning, including that my haikus need work. Yay for revising, right?Continue reading “Haiku #2, Haiku #3”
Jordyn Saelor 