This is from my story Graveyard of Lullabies. I’m comparing Recent revisions vs. the original chapter 1 posted to my blog a year ago. *** Today is the day I bleed aquamarine. The blue-green liquid soaks into my fuzzy pillow, spreading like melted ice. I blink at it. It is a nice pillow. But first:Continue reading “Mirror, mirror, rippling water/a majorly revised opening scene”
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How I revise a story–fight scene
You can check out this story on Wattpad here! This week, I’ll be looking at a fight scene I wrote at the end of chapter 2. First draft vs. most recent draft. *** “Stay back,” red-orange light illuminated the alley, revealing Dante had set aside his bundle of waters and sodas and chips bags, leavingContinue reading “How I revise a story–fight scene”
How I revise a story
This is the first scene of Kree Annihilators, comparing the 1st draft with how it looks after recent revisions. For this article, I broke it down into a few paragraphs at a time, with underlined sections from the first draft and non-underlined sections from post-revision (you may have to view this article on my websiteContinue reading “How I revise a story”
Jordyn Saelor 